I integrated multiple sources into Paper 2 by introducing quotes properly, not just dropping it randomly. After introducing it, I would explain what the quote means and how it connects and backs up the idea that I am presenting. I would usually just drop a quote in somewhere because it relates to the concept I am talking about but I struggled to introduce it and explain. However, through peer review sessions, meeting up with Stephen, and meeting with Jesse, I discovered how to incorporate a quote and weave it into the whole writing piece. I would expect the reader to understand my way of thinking automatically, but peer review sessions have told me otherwise. I needed to show my way of thinking. For example, I chose a specific passage from Paper 2 that shows how I incorporated a quote into my paper. The quote was first introduced by talking about the idea (orange text), which was that home cooking is about the process involved. We came up with an “introducing a quote” template. First, display the author and then talk about how the author presents the idea that the quote is backing up. Once that was done, I had to demonstrate what the quote meant (plum text), which I just did by explaining the quote in my own words. Once that was done, I connected to the idea, which was mentioned in the introduction, except now I am going more in-depth (green text).
“Pollan presents that home cooking is about the process involved and we aren’t cooking from scratch because there are many processed shortcuts. “Harry Balzer, who explained that ‘people call things ‘cooking’ today that would roll their grandmother in her grave — heating up a can of soup or microwaving a frozen pizza’”(Pollan). This quote shows how our grandmothers would be ashamed of our cooking today because there are so many shortcuts. Our grandmothers had to make everything out of scratch and because of society felt it was their duty to cook. It is almost as if calling a frozen pizza, instant ramen noodles, or any processed food, cooking, is disrespectful. It’s because when we think of cooking, the series of actions to achieve the result is brought to thought. “
In class, we had a discussion about integrating our ideas with others. It was advised to avoid listing your ideas, then the articles, and then the favorite meal but to combine, join, and associate them to make up the final piece. For my first draft, I just talked about my ideas and was writing like a robot. My writing was choppy and sounded like I was just answering questions, so there was no flow. But then I saw a couple similarities between my ideas, the author ideas, and the Favorite Meal Essays, so I slowly combined them together by including them in the paragraph. I did this by adding quotes from the articles or Favorite Meal Essays.
